Comments on: Writing Intensity – Going Beyond “Strong Verbs”

By: Suta

Suta — Sat, 12 Dec 2009 05:25:34 +0000

This is what i called one of the quality posts
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By: Carole Mahoney

Carole Mahoney — Fri, 11 Dec 2009 14:20:54 +0000

Thanks Jeff! Your posts are always fun and challenge my own perspective! Love the use of photos for the “ah-ha- I get it now!”

By: Shane Arthur

Shane Arthur — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 21:11:19 +0000

“She walked languidly and suggestively down the stairs and greeted her guests.”

This sentence reminded me of an analogy I’d like to share.

Let’s say you’re at work and someone called you on the phone about a job interview you had that day with another company. You want to keep it secret from coworkers nearby, so you would answer in code like, “The grass is indeed greener on the other side,” indicating you got the job.

“She walked languidly and suggestively down the stairs and greeted her guests,” is therefore a sentence you’d want to “write in code,” i.e., hide how bad it is through revising it.

Hope that made sense.
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By: Jeff

Jeff — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 21:03:23 +0000

Shane,

You crack me up ; ) Thanks for the comment.

And thank you as well, Tom, Roberta, Sue, and Teresa!

- Jeff
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By: Shane Arthur

Shane Arthur — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 20:38:13 +0000

Jeff,
My respect for this post Steven Seagal’d my ass. My muse snapped under the weight of its value, humbling my ego till I felt the cold reality that I need to rub more of your writing against my brain.

By: Teresa Dietze

Teresa Dietze — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 19:26:17 +0000

Impressive! This presentation is clear and immediate, drawing me in as a person as well as a writer. I am impressed as much by what you left out as what you included. Thank you for sharing your artistry.

What I like best is that you are demonstrating how to create depth of feeling and impact instead of surface action. You must live deep to do it.

I love your quote also. And yes–there ARE demons in the deep. As a healer who addresses the energy issues related to what we call demons I can relate!

By: Sue Horner

Sue Horner — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 18:27:54 +0000

Great perspective on the importance of strong verbs, something we all know but do not perhaps work on as hard as we might.

By: Roberta Rosenberg

Roberta Rosenberg — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 18:20:24 +0000

Brilliant – thank you. I was thinking of Michael’s Chabon’s writing style as I slip-slided my way through the examples.
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By: Tom Wanek

Tom Wanek — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 17:33:44 +0000

You rock Jeff! I get a lot of great writing tips from other blogs (you know the ones , but this lesson on writing with intensity is priceless. And here’s the thing, I’ve heard you talk about applying perspective to writing before. Sadly, I had forgotten all about it.

And for the other readers, please don’t think I’m blowing smoke here because Jeff is a colleague of mine. Please try this technique out for yourself. I promise it will take your writing to new heights.
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