The ThinkerLook at the photo to the left. Yeah, it’s Rodin’s The Thinker and you’ve already seen it before – take another good, hard look anyway. In fact, study the thing for a minute. I’ll wait.

OK, having just “experienced” the picture for yourself, read Rodin’s description of his statue:

“What makes my thinker think is that he thinks not only with the brain, with his knitted brow, his distended nostrils, and compressed lips, but with every muscle of his arms, back, and legs; with his clenched fist and gripping toes.”*

Now go back and take another look at the pic. Did you notice new things? Did you find yourself noticing new details on the statue’s nostrils, lips, back, and toes, while giving silent affirmation to Rodin’s words?

That is the mark of great product description: using words to guide the senses and shape the experience.

And the more you sell premium products and experiences – the more you sell the distillation of passion – the more you had better tap into the power of copy to direct the imagination of the reader.

The Science and Art of Great Product Description

Lest you think the Rodin example was nothing but a parlor trick, I thought I’d cite some hard science and proven psychology behind this technique, while also giving some helpful how-to hints:

1) Vividly imagining the future reduces impulsive choices

And the reader’s imagination will trend towards the future – unless YOU direct the imagination of the buyer! I may be tempted to buy your product, but the more I imagine the future rewards and pleasures of sticking to my diet, sticking to my budget, and so on, the less likely I am to buy.

But if the copy directs my senses to vividly imagine the pleasures and benefits of ownership/consumption, I’ll be moved to buy rather than abstain.  Great copy recreates the enthusiast’s experience in the mind of the prospect.  Mediocre copy just describes the product.

2) Translating a product into an experience de-comodifies your product

“If it wasn’t hard, everybody would do it. The hard… is what makes it great.”  Tom Hank’s character said that about baseball, but it applies just as well to premium products and services.  Making a significantly better product requires extra effort and passion.  Often in the service of squeezing out an extra 10% refinement in 10-20 different areas.  And that’s the problem… at least from a copywriter’s standpoint

See, small refinements in a lot of areas don’t translate well in a spec-sheet head-to-head comparison, where the cheaper alternative ends up looking like a 90% as good for half the price alternative.  And that’s why good copywriters lean so heavily on “creation” stories, which project the manufacturers passion onto the reader, and make those relatively fine distinctions seem like all-important differences. Gary Weeks gives a first class example of this in the copy he created for his Weeks Rocker.  There’s a reason the man’s able to sell $1600 rocking chairs over the internet.

3) Curiosity and Education are every bit as powerful as a great deal

When you describe an experience that’s foreign to the reader, you create curiosity – a desire in the reader to “see” for herself. To taste the nuances of flavor in a well crafted wine, or to feel the texture and feedback that only the combination of first-class drawing paper and high-quality charcoal can provide.  Or even to “see” their PPC campaign with new eyes – eyes capable of sifting out the hidden motivations of prospects/searchers and the flawed messaging in the ads.

For many, learning, discovering new experiences, and expanding one’s scope of competency are as seductive a prospect as any straightforward value proposition. Gary Vaynerchuk rode this wave to fame and fortune. And two Maine Lobsterman have taken this kind of value-added offering to a new level, and made themselves into millionaires in the process!  You can too.

4) The Joshua Bell Effect

Asking people to recognize true merit and quality on its own, deprived of any cues or prompts, is simply asking too much from your customers and prospects.  Kind of like asking you to have recognized all those details about Rodin’s The Thinker without his quote as a prompt.

Perhaps the most striking modern-day example of this was an experiment done by the Washington Post wherein Musical Prodigy Joshua Bell played his stradivarius in the subway to see how many would recognize his musical excellence, absent the concert hall cues and media fanfare normally surrounding his performances.  The result: he was ignored by everyone but children. Even music snobs need cues to recognize talented, virtuoso performance.

As a copywriter you’re job is to set the stage for your virtuoso product/service and to provide prospects with the cues they so desperately need to recognize real quality when they see it.  When you tell prospects where to look, how to look, and what to expect, you’re not only enticing their imaginations, but helping those soon-to-be customers to fully recognize the differentiators your client has already baked into the product. Which both sells more product on the front end AND improves customer satisfaction on the back end, too.

Does your product copy merely describe the product?

Or does your copy predict the prospect’s experience of the product, helping them to see with their ears and anticipate all the pleasure and benefits that are sure to come with ownership?

2010-05-03_1347People don’t change their minds – they simply make new decisions based on new information.

If you don’t provide them with new information, they won’t make any new decisions.

That’s Roy Williams’ take on the subject of changing minds, and I tend to agree, depending on how broadly one interprets “information.”  It’s possible to give people no new information in the narrow sense of the word, but to cause them to feel differently about what they already knew.

In other words, you can spark a new decision by providing a new perspective rather than new information.

Case in point: This print ad for BMW…

(The Good)


While I’m not out to make any claims about the ultimate effectiveness of the ad, I am going to say that this represents a far cry from a shameful or gratuitous use of sex.  It’s actually a very deliberate and pointed use of sex-appeal aimed at getting you to feel differently about the desirability of pre-owned cars.

An intellectual approach would be to talk about the inspection and refurbishment that these pre-owned cars go through and the warranty you’ll receive when you buy one.  But that’s been done so many times it’s probably already assumed by the reader.

Readers already know that pre-owned cars are a better deal financially, yet they still feel an irrational desire for “new.”  And irrational obstacles call for emotional advertising.  They call for creating new perspectives rather than providing new information.

Bottom Line:

When you’re contemplating the use of shock-appeal or sex-appeal in an ad, you need to ask yourself if the ad is merely shocking, titillating, and entertaining readers, or if it’s changing how they feel about what you sell.

Otherwise you’ll end up with the Ugly end of Sex in Advertising, such as this ad for… can you even tell?

(The Ugly)


Believe it or not, this is an ad for a vacuum cleaner!

conversion_conference_hearUsSpeak_200x115Who would have thunk it?

At a time when most SEO Conferences have been running for more than a decade, we’re just now having our very first Conversion Conference next week.

Which isn’t to say I’m not excited to be speaking at Conversion Conference West – I’m thrilled! – but that the inaugural nature of the conference indicates both what had been the prevailing industry inattention to conversion rate optimization and how dramatically things have changed in the last two years:

  • Competition has increased for attention, business dollars, and everything else,
  • The economic climate has changed dramatically,
  • Paid traffic has become increasingly more expensive,
  • Social Media has dramatically altered how people spend their time online
  • Online testing platforms have become ubiquitous and their use de rigueur for any serious Website / web marketer

In response we’re witnessing:

If I wanted to be smug, I’d say that these were all things that Bryan and Jeffrey Eisenberg were stressing as far back as 1999 and early, post-dot bomb 2000’s.  But that’s beside the point.  The point is that if YOU’RE not doing these things – or at least busily getting smart on these topics – doing so is now a matter of survival.

Why not jump-start your efforts by attending Conversion West in San Jose, May 4th and 5th?

You can even get a late-bird discount by using Promo Code CCW565

I hope to see you there.

71204_BadHaircutEither you sell $5 haircuts, or you fix $5 haircuts. If you’re selling services, you know what I’m talking about.

Whether you’re selling car washes, copywriting, carpet cleaning, or kitchen remodels, you’ve likely noticed the once-burned aspect of your best customers.  The clients who pay your premium price most willingly and are most appreciative of the differences between you and the price-based competition are usually the clients who already tried the cheapo-charlies and got burned.

And you also probably still pull your hair out when never-burned prospects pass you up for the cheaper option.  Or for no-option and procrastination.

This is where fortune-telling can fill your pockets with gold.

Because you’ve seen this movie before, you know how it ends.  You can predict the precipitant event that’ll jar your prospects from procrastination, or the exact moment of clarity and regret that’ll send them screaming back from the “cheaper” alternative.  And you can describe it with eerily vivid detail and precision – all long before the prospect ever makes his wrong turn.

That way, when your words prove prescient, your dearest prospect will want someone who understands the jam he’s in and who can help him fix it.  So with just a little intelligent planning on your part, you can weave into your storytelling the exact “script” for his return to you, including:

  • The best points in the process for your prospect to switch service providers
  • Justifications for his change in mind
  • Exactly how to contact you
  • What information he’ll need to have on hand
  • What to expect for a solution, etc.

Yes, you can do this in person.  But you can also do it with your Web copy, which will give you 3 major advantages:

1) You reach early stage buyers who are just doing research and potentially re-frame their buying criterion to your advantage.  A few vividly told horror stories sometimes swings decisions around and increases immediate sales.

2) You forewarn even the prospects who still chose the cheaper alternative. After reading your story, prospects who do chose the cheapo charlies are a lot more wary of what can go wrong and head the warning signals earlier in the process, when stuff first starts to slide.

3) You gain instant credibility when newly-burned clients find you from a pain-driven Google search.  You may not pop up for google searches on “inexpensive fashion haircut,” while easily placing 1st for “fixing horrific hair cuts.”  And when that happens, everything you wrote about the daners of the $5 haircut will ring true for the visitors coming to you from that kind of search.  You’ll have just created all kinds of credibility for yourself.

Just do yourself a favor and be as specific and vivid as possible.  Because when you’re describing a future event, specifics make the event feel closer.

And make sure to emphasize your ability to pick-up the pieces when prospects experience a cheapo-charlie disaster.  Direct the movie in your prospect’s head.  Give them a new ending to the film.  Give them a happy ending and watch them flock to your theatre to see it – higher ticket price and all.

4028353766_1326313519Never ask a barber if you need a haircut

– Cowboy Wisdom as quoted by Warren Buffet

Your website, e-mail, and direct mail copy all suffers from a flaw that kills reader belief.  And there’s no real way to prevent that problem – only workarounds and partial solutions.

It’s the nature of the copywriting beast to suffer the fate of the barber telling people they need a haircut – the vested interest of the speaker works against his believability.

And that’s why stories come in so handy.  While the right story won’t prevent the problem, it will overcome it with a double whammy of psychology capable of crushing this credibility gap like an empty beer can. Here’s why:

1) Flattery works, even when you know the flattery isn’t sincere.

Or so says recent psychological research titled: “Insincere Flattery Actually Works“.  Even though we like to think that we’re too smart to be influenced by insincere flattery, our intellectual understanding of the intent to persuade doesn’t stop the emotional influence of the message.

And the same also extends to a story that flatters the listener.  A story that flatters your prospective customers’ sensibilities, suspicions, judgements, or aspirations will emotionally influence them, even when they recognize your vested interest in telling the story.

This stands in sharp contrast to bragging, which never works regardless of how sincere it might be. So why does most copy brag instead of flatter? In the words of Bryan Eisenberg, why is there so much we-we copy?

While emotional-directed advertising has historically performed twice as well as purely rational ads, the key to making those ads work is to focus on the buyer’s emotion, not the seller’s.

2) We unconsciously “see” things through the eyes of the story’s protagonist

When listening to a story, we understand the narrative by picturing the experience as it occurs to the protagonist.  When we hear a story, we identify with the protagonist, not just visually, but emotionally. That’s why we love happy endings, and why watching an authentic tragedy leaves us feeling devastated and drained.

Put these two psychological principles together with the right kind of story and you’ve got persuasive dynamite.  Here’s a perfect case study demonstrating just how effective this can be:

Beckley Automotive’s 30% Sales Jump

My friend and colleague, Chuck McKay, works with a 15-bay repair shop in Des Moines by the name of Beckley Automotive.  Steve Beckley’s shop works on the European Imports he loves and drives himself: Audi, BMW, Mercedes, Land Rover, Mini, Volkswagen, Saab, and Volvo (along with Acura, Lexus, and Infinity).

For years Steve has purchased lists of European Import owners in Des Moines and has used multiple post card mailings to remind owners that someone in town understands all the ins and outs of the cars they drive. Over the years those cards have payed off handsomely.

But the cards suffered from the “barber telling you you need a haircut” problem: it’s just not very credible when anyone brags about how great they are – especially when they’re out to get your business.

So Chuck advised Steve Beckley to do two things with his mailings:

  1. Stop appealing to European Import owners and start appealing to owners of specific brands.  In the words of Chuck: “A Range Rover owner doesn’t think of himself as a ‘European Import Owner.’  He thinks of himself as someone who drives a Range Rover.  Speak directly to him.”  In other words, appeal to emotion& self-identity.
  2. Stop speaking like an advertiser and start communicating more like a good friend.  Start telling stories.

So to Steve’s immense credit, he took that advice, ditched his old copy, and wrote awesomely effective stories for each of the European marques he works on.  Stories like this one he sent to Mercedes owners:

Beckley Imports

Wouldn’t You Feel Smug?

Can you just imagine how self-satisfied you’d feel upon reading this story if you owned and drove a Mercedes Benz? You might just feel downright smug after reading that story.  And even though you’d know, in the back of your mind somewhere, that Beckley Automotive was trying to flatter you with that story, it wouldn’t matter: you’d still walk away a heck of lot more likely to call them for your auto work.

Indeed, that was exactly the case for recipients of these story-based postcard mailers, whose increased patronage of Beckley Automotive led to a 29.9% increase in sales this March over March of last year.

And that’s the power of smug.

It’s also a great way to sell a man a haircut when all the world can see that you’re a barber.

P.S. Chuck McKay does a lot more than advise clients on messaging and copy.  He’s also a superb Business and Marketing Strategist who manages to combine those rare-enough-on-their-own traits of clear thinking, small business savvy, and creative execution.  If you’re looking to grow in spite of the current economic climate, do yourself a favor – check out Chuck’s blog and drop him a message.

baddesignThere are a lot of bad Web designers out there.

Of course, that’s nothing against Web designers – there’s also a lot of atrocious Web copy out there, too. The difference is that everyone thinks they can write well, while most everyone believes they can’t draw. Moreover, the popular perception of good writing centers on clarity, whereas the popular perception of designcenters on creativity. All of which means bad design gets unleashed on the world, and goes un-optimized, more often than bad web copy.

Having dropped that turd in the punchbowl, let me admit that I’m no designer myself, with any knowledge I do have coming from self education.

Yet precisely because I am not a designer, I’ve always aimed my self-education at developing a knowledge of design fundamentals rather than of design tools.  And this has left me continually scratching my head when I consistently see those fundamental design principles violated by Web designers.

Sometimes I wondered if it was just me and my own deeply-ingrained Conversion-centric view of Web design, pounded into me by Bryan and Jeffrey Eisenberg.  But as it turns out, it ain’t just me…

Why does this matter to a copywriter?

Because your Web copy’s effectiveness will be dramatically affected by page design.

So what do I recommend if you’re a copywriter who is forced to work with a mediocre designer?  Educate yourself, learn to speak design, and force designers/clients to test disputed design decisions.

Here are 14 Starter Resources to Begin Your Design Education:

When you can articulate your objections to bad design more eloquently and professionally than the designer can advocate for his design, you’ll have a huge leg up.  And when that fails, you can always demand a split test between the simpler, cleaner design and whatever creative layout your designer has come up with.

So what about you?  What design resources have you found invaluable?  What do you recommend when working with a less-than-stellar Web designer?  Let me know in the comments!

P.S. The “Bad Design Kills” icon was created by Von Glitschka and used with permission.

P.P.S. Sorry for the lapse in posts.  Had some health issues and am just now feeling on the mend.

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